blog #7

There were things that we reviewed or read in class that helped me realize how to improve my writing. Some of the powerpoints we went over in class were helpful. They pointed out specific things in sentence structures in writing such as using passive and active voice and how to get rid of unnecessary words, grammars, comparisons in different stories of different rhetorical situations. Before our first paper, Ms. Spencer posted a few literacy narrative short stories, we read and went over them in class which gave us an idea how the writing would look like, different ways in writing it and also on choosing a topic especially if you were struggling with it as I was.I like how there are examples on errors and bad sentence structures and we went over on how to revise them. The other aspect that I find really helpful is the peer review we do before every final paper is due. Sometimes I don't recognize my mistakes reading my own paper but having someone to read and give opinions on my paper really help me improve my writing. I think my writing improved specifically in sentence structures. These aspects led me into a deeper understanding in writing.

blog #6

Ad analysis and literacy narrative share a few similarities but they are completely two different types of writing. Literacy narrative are mostly written in first person's point of view and in stories form of writing with begginning and end. In contrast, ad analysis is a discription of an ad through analyzing it. Purposes of both writing are similar, to keep the readers interested in reading. In literacy narrative, I try to tell the reader the story of my writing experience, to have them picture and imagine how my teacher who taught me how to write looks like. In ad analysis, I described the ad precisely for the readers to picture how the ad looks like without physically seeing it. Audience are pretty broad, it could be any readers. The tone of literacy narrative could be humorous or serious depending how the story is told. In ad analysis, the tone is rather convincing as in selling an advertisement. Genre is broad as well, it could be anything from music, people or materials for ad analysis. In literacy narrative, it could be more focused on oneself if its told in first person's perspective, in this case it could be about reading and writing.

blog #4

My final draft was more descriptive than my rough draft. I did not describe the teacher in my story well enough for readers to imagine how she looks like. I also revised my conclusion and added my feelings about the paper as my peer reviewer mentioned it to me. I did not make any major revisions to my paper because my rough draft was pretty much organized in a story form and it focused on me as a writer and it just needed a few  additional discriptions on particular things to it, so i thought it wasn't necessary for any major revisions. I realized that I have trouble using discriptive words to describe partiuclar things or person. I revised my small errors and sentence structures as I prove read my own rough draft and I also took my peer reviewer's opinions. I think I had a strong thesis but my conclusion was rather weak, which did that give a good ending to the story.

blog #3

A good paper must first meet all the basic requirements of an essay. If both "A" and "C" papers are being scanned through briefly, you might not recognize the difference. They both have the basic things that a complete essay has such as introduction, body and conclusion. However, when both papers are being read carefully, there are alot of different qualities that separate the two papers. The tenses of an essay is really important, if the paper is the past then through out the whole paper, the verbs and sentences must be past tense and also if the paper is current then present tenses are use. A "C" paper might lacks on the tense of the paper but an "A" paper usually don't. An "C" paper might have alot of passive voice writting in it, which contain alot of unnecessary words that make the sentence long, wordy and wanders around the point. In contrast, an "A" paper does not have passive voice in it, it has active voice writing which is short and straight to the point that does not bore the readers out. C paper sometimes has its weakness in certain area of an essay, it might has a good thesis but lacks on its conclusion which does not conclude the paper well enough or vice sersa. An "A" paper on the other hand must have both a strong thesis and a well ended conclusion. For me, personally I am pretty good and clear on the past and present tenses of my paper, I somtimes use alot of passive writing in my paper, and I struggle with my conclusion at times.

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Audiences- There is a broad variety of audiences when it comes insurance. For this insurance ad, their targeted audiences are mostly working women, mothers, families, friends and relatives perhaps every individuals in the household or a family as a whole. The mother in the picture dressed in a bussiness suit is putting on her kid' s shoes and talking on the phone as if shes dealing with some urgent problems. This ad is trying to attract women who are dealing with the same problems and Statefarm Insurance is here to solve them.
Genre- It is different from other insurance ads. I would picture a house or car when it comes to insurance. This falls into the home and family genre. Other insurance ads might show a picture of nice fancy looking car or house which does not reveal much what the insurance can offer. However, this ad shows how much Statefarm can understand, solve your problems by protecting your family, house and yourself.
Tone- A typical busy american family life with the busy mother balancing work and home, taking care of her children brought a serious yet warm and loving tone.